It seems much easier to subside than subsist
When the daily struggles start taking a toll
I wish I could just ignore when fate comes knocking on my door
Its screams bringing out all my wounds in the open
The wounds that I believed to be healed once
It does take a toll on my heart I believe
Makes me forget where I am
Reminding me of every failure of the past
The times I tried and failed so hard
Clouding every good thing that has ever happened
It pulls me close and whispers its achievements
And I shrink like a star in the vast universe
My stubborn heart still beats somehow
Accepting defeat seems hard while I can still try
Fate attacks me at the weakest moments
So everday I try to become a stronger me.
This poem was inspired by the poem ‘Superiority to Fate’ by Emily Dickinson which you can find below. I wrote this poem for David’s Wea’ve Written Weekly poetry prompt where Poet of the Week, Steven S. Wallace, has challenged us to write a poem in any style and any form based on this poem.
Superiority to Fate
Is difficult to gain
’Tis not conferred of Any
But possible to earn
A pittance at a time
Until to Her surprise
The Soul with strict economy
Subsist till Paradise.



Aditi, your very first line -no joke- sucked me in! And your final line left me cheering (inside my head) – this is such a beautiful, powerful piece. Thank you for sharing!
❤
David
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Thanks David. I intentionally added that last line to cheer myself up! ❤️
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Such emotion and then the being made small and finally bursting into hope! It almost felt that little star became a super nova!!
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*giggles* I am glad that it brings out such bright feelings. Thanks for the kind comment❣️
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Aditi
I just wanna let you know that this week’s W3 prompt, hosted by our beloved Lesley, is now live!
Looking forward to seeing what you come up with 😀
Much love,
David
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Hi, Aditi ❤
I just wanna let you know that this week's W3 prompt, hosted by the lovely Sunra Rainz, is now live:
Enjoy 🙂
~David
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